People chose:

Znaiu chto ban. No puskai eta temka povisit paru dnei. Potom udolite =)


People chose:

Courthouse at the god. In that court the god choose who can go in a heaven and who must fall into the hell. The court of soul.
And at the next court come young couple. They married and lived together for a long time, and died when they were old. But after death any chosee, how he want to looks, young or old, its not important in that court. God look into the people soul and he see all bad and good things, true or lie.

The couple come to the god, without any fear in they eyes. And god look at them, look at this young boy, look at the beatifull girl.

Before court is began, young people ask god to let them stay together. No matter of what road he will give them.

And god says:
- I see all your life, every things that you do or even want to do. I see good things and see
some bad things. I know all about you. But before I give you your own road to go by. I will say. One of you live clean life, do good things and never ask anything for himself. The other live in lie, he don't spend any day without lie. so both of you have different road. Do you still want stay together? Even know that one of you can lost a gods heaven? And all time spend in hell fire, untill the world not stop, and they won't be forgiven.?

Young man stay near, his girfriend, wife, the person with whom he spend his best time of life. He feels sad, because in his mind his live was full of bad things and full of lies. And this boyfriend says to the god:

-I spend all my life with this person, I cant imagine my life without her. I know I can’t go to heven without her, and I know even if I am in hell I will still be happy, because the person whom I love stays in the heaven. I will choose to go anywhere with her. I do my choice.

When the boy is saying these words, his girlfriend feels a deep pain. She sees all the lies that she did, said to this man. So young and so old, but not be afraid of anything even say the words to god like this. Don't be afraid to make god angry. She knows that she loves him very much, knows that she loves him from beginning to this time. She wonders why she choose the wrong road, why she does like this. And she can’t find the answer . When she was alive, it was so normal, so interesting and sometimes nothing special. When she is thinking , the god looks at the girl, he sees all the thoughts in her mind. The god feels a little sad. Why he makes people sometimes so weak? And the god says:

-I understand you and I accept your choice. So do it, you two will be separated, one to the hell and the other to the heaven. You will go to the heaven. But before you go I will open both of your soul to each other.

And after the god says that, all the life of them is in their heads, they see all that, they feel like they do it by themselves. And the young man falles down on the floor, he sees and he undertands what happened around him, behind his back. May be some inside he feel it, but don't want to believe.


when the boy falles down, the girl begin to feel so painful in her heart that befor was only a game. She sees how hard he loved her, how deep this love. She feels painful, hateful, she begins to hate herself. To hate because the lies, because this pain. She never thought, never believed love like this, in love , even nothing can be everything when you are with your lover.

Boy looks up, where she stands, and he have a different feeling he wants to hate her, but he can’t. He still loves her, this love was no any things and nothing cant stop it. And she knows it too, and she feels more painful too.

And god sends them to the heaven. Where they stay together. They are happy outside, but are so painful inside. Outside is heaven, and inside is hell. Even the hell will never do so many pain that they feel inside, because this is the pain in the heart. They stay there, and they feel more painful, than any hell can do.


The god looks at them, he sees many things, bad and good. He sees love and trust. And he love all of his children, all of the creature in the world. And he knows what will happen. This couple stay a long time in the heaven. And someday, they go. The god give them another chance, another choice to live, to love. And at this time he gives them choice. And are they more strong? The god knows, they will come to him again ,don’t remember that they used to be here before, and they will be in his courthouse again.
And at next time they will go to heaven,
together,
happy,
forever.

Happy end



Anybody sometimes lie. But some lie is bad anyhow. People try find execuse for themself and say it's normal, all people do like this. We try live in lie and try to lie ourself that it's normal, It's ok. But it's all wronge, we must always remember, care and dont lie for people about who we care, we love and who care and love us.

Dont do the thing, that in future you can feel shine.

I write story my self, so sorry may be its not so good.

Не верю, что ты писал ее сам. Где-то я ее видела. Вот только не помню где...

kves предупреждение за транслит

ошибок бы поменьше, было б прикольно.....

писал сам.

Идея пришла чуть больше недели назад. Написал 3-и дня назад.

Ошибки, за это сорри. У меня Ворлд не работает, ошибки не мог исправить.

автору баню бы. шоб на русском писал.

не люблю такие тексты -незачОд в общем

Сообщение от Cohava

Английский совсем не примитивный. Во многих аспектах он богаче русского, например в передачe оттенков действий и не только )).
Это не мое мнение (я бы не посмела) , а мнение классика замечательно писавшего на обоих языках.

ДАвайте изучать финский. 26 времен - в отличие от "примитивных" русских прошедшее, настоящее, будущее. Даже английский богаче - их целых 12! )

Речь вообще то о том, что примитивный ТЕКСТ, написанный к тому же на ПРИМИТИВНОМ английском, да еще и с ОШИБКАМИ - не лучший способ выпендриться в литературке.

ЗЫ: 90% читателей форума даже мягкий знак в глаголах типа "находится" и "находиться" ставят с ошибкой - зато английский любяяяят.

2 аффтар: Как беден Ваш язык... Если Вы претендуете на литературное творчество, то пишите не как школьник "топики" к экзамену.

2 участникам дискуссии: Право вы, ребята, меня удивляете... нет языков бедных и богатых, примитивных и сложных, все они (языки) уникальны, в каждом есть своя особенность. А противникам английского могу предложить забыть про интернет, например, в прЫнципе

Язык это знание. Нет лучше или хуже.

Ни рускии, ни англискии не мои родние язики.За ошибки я извиняиус.

Цель: мне было интересно передать саму идею разказа.